Thursday, 14 April 2016

Just a visitor

A tough challenge today from NaPoWriMo requiring precision, numerical skill, rhyming and, of course, the right words.  It's of Chinese origin: a san san, or three three. An 8-line poem, using three images or terms, each of which is repeated three times, and with a rhyme scheme: abc ab dcd
So ... this is my first attempt.  Definitely needs further work.


Grabbing the money he says it’s a piece of cake
a shaft of light, he is just a visitor.
Just a visitor, a negative force,
everything is a piece of cake, mistakes
are a piece of cake, shafts of blind light
cut hearts in a chaotic tunnel where
he is just a visitor, divorced
blinded, a shaft of light in the air.

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